The Encounter

It’s #FlashFriday again, and the #FridayFictioneers are writing and sharing their 100-word(+/-) stories over at Madison Woods’ blog.  You can check out some of their stories and even share one of your own, if you’re interested.

So far I’ve typically used Madison’s inspiration images as a prompt, but yesterday I came across a soundtrack that I really liked and wanted to write a scene based off that.  Here’s a YouTube video of the piece that inspired this 100-word short for this week, from the Tomb Raider: Underworld soundtrack by Colin O’Malley, supervised by Troels Brun Folmann:

I found an inspiration image, as well:

I don’t know if that particular jellyfish is stingless (relevant later), but I thought it was pretty. 🙂 Anyway, it was just for inspiration.

Oh yeah–and Lois is back! 😀

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The Encounter

Lois plunged through an underwater tunnel to escape the imploded ruins above.  She burped out bubbles, anxious to resurface.

A blue glow beckoned from a leftward passage and she surged towards it.  Rough stone abruptly fell into a formless void, leaving her floating.  Overhead, a great mass of delicate translucent creatures pulsed with light, gorging and relapsing to propel themselves gracefully through the water.

The transfixing beauty involuntarily tranquilized Lois, subduing her need for air.  She watched, unhurried, as a jellyfish drifted by; its tentacles brushed her face.  Invigorated, she shoved water behind her, breaching through the creatures without fear.

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20 thoughts on “The Encounter

    • Maybe! It would have been cool to do more with the ending, make it even more ambiguous as to what took place between Lois and the jellyfish. But those 100 words! Gah…it’s tough sometimes.

      Thanks for reading, Stephen. 🙂

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  1. What beautiful imagery. This sentence in particular:

    “Overhead a great mass of delicate translucent creatures pulsed with light, gorging and relapsing to propel themselves gracefully through the water.”

    That was beautifully written 🙂

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    • Thanks, Madison!

      You know, I should have tried and worked the dynamite in, too, at least as it pertains to the ruins. Too bad I didn’t think of it before. :/

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  2. Lovely, lovely little bit of story here. You have great use of images and emotions. I’d like to see the opening a little stronger, though. Perhaps a little more ethereal and less literal to draw us into that lovely, if frightening, underwater experience. Great job!!

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    • Thanks, KD!

      I agree: the opening could be stronger. That was the one area I really wanted to squeeze more into. Couldn’t figure something out!

      On another note, an implosion isn’t really all that ethereal, and neither is having to plunge into water not knowing if there is another way out; those pretty stark experiences, I think. But it would have been neat to explore that more–play up the contrast between “bam! implosion” and “ah, I could drown!” followed by that sudden ethereal serenity in the water.

      Probably could have made that happen with some extra words, but definitely not in 100…

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    • This is interesting. May I ask what led you to believe this? If there was something specific I said. (And Stephen, too, if he’s still reading, heh.)

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